By Vicki McCarthy
Posted 7 November 2015, 1.46pm est
Was wondering people on here still offered presenter demo critiques at all please?
I present a show on my local station, been doing it a little over a year, just one evening a week, a 3 hour show. I promote and play local bands and artists as well as playing the hits in between. I also interview local bands and bigger names if they are playing locally.
I would like to get ore experience and maybe try getting some work on other stations too, but I have never made a demo until today.
It would be great to get it critiqued before I send it off anywhere.
The link is below. Please forgive my editing, it's not a strong skill of mine, any constructive feedback welcome, please be kind!
Vicki, you have a great voice and a brilliant presenting style, just one thing. Watch the occassional end of word where you drop letters, everybody does it but if you want to make it, you'll need to practice pronouncing every word and not dropping t's and d's. A really good demo.
Thank you Dominic. That's my accent, being close to London! I do annunciate more clearly and speak slower on air than in real life, will try harder though. :) Just don't want to sound forced or unnatural.
Any comment on the content?
Thanks so much for taking the time to reply. Appreciate it.
Just listened again, the first link was quite punchy, the pace of it meant you got away with making a list of what was coming up. Two things, if applying for a commercial station, don't say what time you're on 'till as most stations run day parts rather than shows. If there's one word I would ban every presenter using, it's "of course". The first link ends in a mumble which is best avoided.
The voice over was good and natural, and the interview sounded like you were best mates with them.
Hi Vicki, this is is good. Enthusiastic and bright and you sound like you want to be there.
I think you could make it even better by thinking a bit more about some of the words you use from your listener's point of view. You want to sound like you're just talking, rather than talking on the radio. So, for example...
"You're still listening to the Scene." Not if I've just turned on the radio.
"I'm going to be bringing you those interviews I recorded..." doesn't sound very in the moment. It's fine to say "Later, I'm going to talk to..."
During the read, "There's a chance to see..." is passive: "You can see..." is personal and how you'd tell a friend. "Tickets are priced at" and "for more information and entry requirements" is very 'written'. Adapt it to be more personal and everyday: "You can get a ticket for a tenner" and "find all the details at mkfm.com". Maybe, instead of reading the 'read', try making bullet points and explain it as if you were telling a friend on the phone.
Dominic's just mentioned "of course"....
Also, I'm a little thrown by a show that is billed as a local music show where all the music I hear is familiar. Maybe it's clearer in the context of the show.
Little details but could make a big difference.
Thanks Michael. This is really helpful too.
My show promotes and showcases local music, but also plays known music too. I only kept one link of local music in the demo, so as to not alienate any PD listening. But yeah, I do hear what you are saying.
I will print all these comments out and try and incorporate them in my links this week and then re-do my demo.
Thank you again.
Also... With regards to live reads. I was trying show the fact that I can do them, are you essentially saying that live reads should sound like they are live reads?
I suppose using them as springboard rather than a script shows more personality?
I can't tell you what a programmer wants to hear in a demo, I'm afraid. I just know that as a listener I'd rather hear someone telling me interesting stuff in a personal way than hearing "a live read."
Hey Vicki that's a great demo. I'd give you a slot on my station tomorrow. I think you may be a little to far away for that to be practical but I'll contact you through LinkedIn anyway! Good luck.
Hi Vicki I agree that is a really good demo. I am looking to add to my team of presenters at my station. If you are interested drop me a note at email@example.com. I hope to hear from you! All the best, Renna.
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